My class topic this week is about rockets so we had to write a story about a man going to the moon and make up what happened. I really enjoyed making up what happened in the story and using descriptive words. I am still wondering what else I could improve my work. This is my story.
Wednesday, April 29, 2020
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Wonderful narrative Kaycee! I like your descriptive language - slithery body and vibrate like thunder! Painted a vivid picture in my mind! I also like how you wrote in paragraphs. I can see why the Rocket never left the backyard again! You sure do like creative writing!
ReplyDeleteI was a little scared when reading your story - you had me on the edge of my seat as I was unsure of what the creature on the moon was. Then it attacked Micah! I was scared for Micah, and am glad that he made it home safely.
ReplyDeleteThe descriptive language you used was effective and the story had a nice flow to it. I also like how you have given your writing a good, interesting title.
It is an awesome story - you should be proud!